Thursday, September 04, 2008

The Manson Girls Filmic Train Wreck


This isn't ever gonna not suck...
Anyway I got a special request to look for this scene so here it is- as inaccurate as possible.

BRENDA NARRATING O.S.

After the sentences were read out in court, Sandra,

Squeaky, Michael and myself just pulled up stakes...

EXT. BRENDA’S HOUSE IN STOCKTON – DAY

An establishing shot.

BRENDA NARRATING O.S. cont.

… and set up shop in Stockton, where we did

what we always did… We set out on a life of

crime and pretended we’d live forever in perfect

bliss… We manufactured speed… We robbed…

We stole… And sometimes we killed…

INT. BRENDA’S HOUSE – DAY

Brenda, Michael and a MALE and FEMALE COUPLE with a BABY are sitting at the table cutting SPEED. The woman has some very distinctive TATTOOS ON HER HAND.

BRENDA NARRATING O.S.

We lived the criminal’s fantasy and when reality

impinged on our little world of criminal make

believe, we’d take drugs so we could continue the

fiction that the life we were living would never end…

(beat)

But of course, just below the surface we all knew

how it was going to end... Even if we weren’t

able to admit it to ourselves…

EXT. HIGHWAY – NIGHT

A POLICE CAR rolls down the highway.

INT. POLICE CAR – SAME MOMENT

A single COP sits behind the wheel, when he passes something OFF CAMERA that gets his attention.

COP’S POV – as he passes a deserted construction area off the side of the highway, where an old CHEVY SEDAN without any lights on is stirring up dust around an enormous, 30 TON EARTH MOVER with SOMEONE SITTING IN THE OPERATOR’S SEAT.

BACK TO SCENE

The Cop slows down in preparation for making a U-Turn.

EXT. CONSTRUCTION SITE – MOMENTS LATER – NIGHT

Brenda sits in the operator’s seat of the EARTH MOVER, fiddles around with the controls, while her latest boyfriend, Michael Montfort, stands below looking impatient.

MICHAEL

(annoyed)

I thought you said you knew how to work this

thing!

BRENDA

This one’s kind’a big, okay?!

INSERT ON CONTROLS – as Brenda pushes a button, making THE ENGINE TURN OVER and START UP..

BACK TO SCENE

MICHAEL

Okay, okay! Let’s get this thing moving!

BRENDA

Just hold on, goddamnit! I’m doing the best I can!

MICHAEL

Just hurry the fuck up!

Brenda pulls one of thirty levers.

WIDER – as the SHOVEL lurches upward.

MICHAEL

Now dig that fuckin’ hole!

BRENDA

Okay, okay!!!

Suddenly the entire area is lit up by intensely bright light.

ANOTHER ANGLE – Brenda and Michael are illuminated by a bunch of COP LIGHTS.

Two COPS put Michael in handcuffs.

ANOTHER ANGLE – as a handcuffed Brenda is brought around to the rear of the Chevy as another COP pops the trunk.

INSERT ON TRUNK – the BODIES of TWO MEN are stuffed into the trunk.

COP O.S.

Looks like they were killed with a shotgun...

BACK TO SCENE

COP

(to Brenda)

What, you were just gonna bury these guys on

the side of the road?

COP 2 O.S.

Call an ambulance! This one’s still alive!

ANOTHER ANGLE – as a barely breathing MAN is pulled from the trunk and laid on the ground.

INT. SMALL HOUSE IN STOCKTON – KITCHEN - DAY

Brenda and Michael Montfort sit at the kitchen table with their hands cuffed behind their backs, while COPS move in and out all over the place.

COP O.S.

(calling)

Got something here!

INT. BASEMENT – SAME MOMENT

A bunch of COPS have set up lights and are digging in the dirt.

ANGLE ON DIRT – as a WOMAN’S HAND with the same DISTINCTIVE TATTOOS as the woman seen cutting speed with Brenda and Michael is uncovered.

ANOTHER COP O.S.

We’ve got a body down here... Looks pretty

fresh...

BRENDA NARRATING O.S.

Altogether, because of a technicality, I ended

up serving a little over three years for being an

accessory after the fact to four murders, while

Michael got life...


5 comments:

Pristash said...

We already have seen this one, no?

ColScott said...

have we?
sigh

FrankM said...

Well I hadn't. Thanks Col, for giving me a good laugh. I mean you couldn't invent it.

Sorry, I forgot. They did.

But laughs apart, surely this has to be actionable .. ?

Frank

LilMagil said...

Actionable legally?.. no, not likely. That's what all the disclaimers are for(this film is based on fact, some characters and scenes have been dramatized & fictionalized for dramatic purposes..etc..on & on,lawyers etc). Actionable against bad taste..poor writing..for sure! But not yet legislated,here in Canada nor the States (as far as I know). 'Lil

A.C. Fisher Aldag said...

I know! We'll set the "Manson Girls" movie to the peppy music of a defunct 70s Swedish pop band. We'll film it on a Greek island. We'll hire a bunch of British actors like Pierce Brosnan who can't sing! "here we go again, my my, how can I resist ya?" And then we'll... wait a minute... You claim that the concept has already been DONE?!?